Imagine if someone you loved was in a horrible car accident, leaving them with a severely damaged organ. The doctors said it could take years to receive an organ donation, and that time wasn’t an option, that person was going to die. Wouldn’t you try and do anything you possibly could to save that loved ones life? Just exactly how far would you go? With cloning, saving the life of a loved one could be made possible.
When we hear the word ‘cloning’, the first thing we think of is what we see in the movies; exact replicas of people running around and destroying the world. But when scientists say the word cloning, that’s not exactly what they have in mind. Cloning can be used as a technology, in many positive ways, allowing advancements in medicine, healing, and disease treating. A technology that could save lives? I would say that is a pretty positive addition to the scientific world. With such an amazing technology, why are people with very little knowledge on cloning so quick to judge?
I don't like the hypothetical imagine if scenario of the first paragraph, it is not concrete enough to sustain my interest. In the second paragraph I don't find a useful thesis statement that is going to prepare me for what I am going to find out form you paper. I f you could say something more concrete about ways scientists have been using cloning to prepare your reader, I think it would be better.
ReplyDeleteYou could totally find a story to fit the description of what you're saying in the first paragraph. I like where you're going with it though.. I would add more information in your second paragraph and be a little more detailed. So far so good. :)
ReplyDeleteYou've definitely got me thinking about cloning in a different aspect than before. More information and little more elaborating would definitely hook me in though!
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like a good start but could use a little more to get the reader hooked.
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